The person I admire most is our monitor, Zhang Liang. He is a good-looking 17-year-old boy. He has a handsome face and there is always a bright smile on it.

　　As a monitor, Zhang Liang does well both in his studying and helping the teachers. Besides, he likes studying science very much and has made some wonderful inventions. He is always helpful when others meet with difficulties and it moves me most.

　　He is one of the best students our school has ever had and he is highly thought of by all of the teachers and students.

高级范文

The person I admire most

　　Of all the persons I know, Zhang Liang is the one I admire most. He is a good-looking 17-year-old boy, who has a handsome face and always wears a bright smile.

　　As a monitor, Zhang Liang keeps a good balance between studying and helping the teachers. He is also an enthusiastic fan of science and has made some big inventions. What impresses me most is his readiness to help others when they meet with difficulties.

　　Such is the person I admire most, a kind and creative one. I feel so lucky to have such an amazing monitor.

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1. 两篇习作的结构都很清晰，衔接紧凑，覆盖了所有的要点。

2. 高级范文中使用了很多看似简单却表达十分恰当的词汇，如：keep a good balance between ... and ..., be an enthusiastic fan of ..., big inventions, readiness to do sth.等。

3. 高级范文中使用了一些复杂的语法结构，如：定语从句who has a handsome face and always wears a bright smile和I admire most，主语从句What impresses me most is ...，倒装句Such is the person ... 等，所有这些都给文章增色不少。

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